Poem: Please let me know what you think

I wrote this poem this evening for my school talent show..let me know what you guys think:), it’s about a mother who’s addicted to drugs

“The Final Straw” I’m sitting on the cold bathroom floor looking at my fingers; am I holding up three or four? I’ve tried to quit you before But everytime I take a dose; I keep on wanting more You left your evidence all over me I have blackened indents all over my body You are my dream get away from my miseries You make me forget that I have no money and that I have to feed my 3 month old baby I just can’t give you up now There’s got to be a way for me to keep you somehow Just one more hit; I promise I will take care of all of this the fear in this room is so loud I can feel it all around It seems like the world’s weight is crashing down on me As I hear my baby crying out desperately I try to get up but I have no energy My body is slowly shutting down on me I can’t die now; atleast not today I want to live to see my son’s first birthday I just wish I hadn’t taken that last draw Because sadly; that was the final straw.

Answer #1

I like it :] you qood .

Answer #2

thats sad!!!

Answer #3

thats good

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