What do you think of this poem I wrote?

Thanks, kinda tricky to get the words to fit :(

It’s really good Miggy Poo :) The last two sentences are a bit repetitive….I think if you replaced “love” in “I leave you with my love” with “heart”, it may make the “truly am in love with you” part a bit more powerful. Just a thought :) Beyond that, I’m glad you feel that way, assuming it is based somewhat from truth. And to that special girl who is likely reading this now, I do hope she holds that love well.

its really sweet :)

oh my god is beautiful!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Awww thanks Heaven, I got into panic mode when I couldn’t find any words… :(

Thanks! :)

I dunno about beautiful, could be a bit better but thank you! :3

You did very well sweety. You know I’m the grammar Nazi, so if I say it’s good…well gee! Haha. The life and life in the first stanza may need a tiny tweak too, like “electrifying me inside” or “over the lights around” “over the lights of now” “over the lights herein”….etc.

I miss the old editing button for this reason, I’d just let you have at it but you can’t do that lol. :S Thanks, I’ll take electrifying me inside’’ to keep the effect :)

I could edit the post, but no comments after. I’d look like a dummy for the suggestions because they wouldn’t exist anymore…haha

Ah well that makes a lot of sense :3 thanks so much Heaven, just like I was looking for! :)

Ha, I may be a bit picky at times, so sorry about that. Really, just trying to help if possible. You don’t need it much, if at all :)

It’s still very appreciated :)

OMG THAT IS AMAZING <3 (when ever I have to write a poem for class i’m funmailing you…lmfao)

OMG THAT WAS AMAZING <3 (when ever I have to write a poem for class i’m funmailing you lmfao)

ZOMG!! That was greeeeat! Lol I looked it over at first and the big words scared me an itsy bit :S but I read it and it sucked foot! :D

That’s meant in a good way ^_^ It’s a new thingy I made up :D

It’s so cute Mig. Keep up the writing, I love it. :)

its an amazing poem, there are websites for people who enjoy wiritng poems and from all oveer the world allpoetry.com, it’s a good website, you should use it, with such great talent:)

Haha, when I got this in my email I was like ‘’sucked foot? :(‘’ but thanks for clarifying :)

wow :}

wow :}

Oh why thank youuu! :3

Aww I will, don’t worry! It’s kinda spontaneous so you might have to wait a bit lol :)

Lol ik what you mean! My poetry is spontaneous too. :)

Haha, I’m flattered, It’s spontaneous though so you have to catch me at the right time :)

You’re welcome :) it’s like the opposite of sucking d!ck (but I guess that isn’t all that bad either :3)

Depends who does it lol…

The suck d1ck face to the rescue :O haha

it was beautiful. i love it =) you should write some more. . .

I would but i’ts spontaneous, not planned so whenever it comes, it comes lol. :S

It is very beautiful and conveys the reality better than most other things.

I think that your poem is very sweet. Whoever receives it will love it. =)

You really thinsk so?! thanks Inez :D

Awww thanks, you’re right about that :3