How does this personification sounds?

Please be honest if I need to make corrections.

Memories of a Cell Phone

I’m never alone but I also don’t have a home, Everybody owns me, many says I’m extremely attractive, I come in all different shapes and colors; Being on magazines and televisions is my life, So yes, I’m very popular.

Every year my looks and features are improved, I give some people Google but they are some who just can’t afford me. When I’m out of credit, I borrow credit. When my battery life weakens, I always scream when I need to be charge. To be honest with you, I’m proud to say I end relationships.

My hobbies are: attending church, parties, traveling and going to school, I’m also good on spreading gossips but my favorite is singing, I love to ring and when I ring too much, I annoy everyone but when I’m silent they wonder why. However, I do fear water because it can kill me.

I don’t give good service when I’m on the highways Yet I’m everybody’s best friend, I can easily be repaired or replaced, Although I get abandon sometimes, I still make them happy for who I am.

When I’m alone I always get stolen by strangers, They sometimes sell me cheap. If you want me and have the cash then go check my latest styles; I can make you look famous and important. Yes, the life of a cell phone is always exciting.

Answer #1

thats really good, except on the second line it should just be say not says. but apart frm that you don’t need to correct anything, its amazing :)

Answer #2

It needs a bit of work. : /

Answer #3

However, I do fear water because it can kill me.

I dont like that line

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