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The first thing I noticed about him were his eyes. I thought it was pretty remarkable that so many different shades of blue were reflected in them.
Good starter or not? Constructive critism(cant spell) please
The first thing I noticed about him were his eyes. I thought it was pretty remarkable that so many different shades of blue were reflected in them. Kind of like the ocean, But from that moment I could feel that he was much deeper than any Ocean I've ever seen. You cannot glance in his direction without locking your gaze into his. He had a unique way of capturing your mind for a moment and making it seem like years.
Just a suggestion lol. I don't know...
I like it, but you might want to change the word remarkable to something else. Maybe amazing or something. I like it though!
yeah it's great!!! so much better than what I can write :) funmail it to me when you finish please :)
thanks! yea actually it will be. There will be more coming, so watch this space
ok can't wait to hear the rest of it :) just funmail when you finish it
it sound perfect. :D sound like a story with a deep romance in it
take your time I got at least 15 years left in my life :D
did you ever get the next part? funmail me if you did!
sure. IF I finish it. will try though :)
very nice im instantly into it!
cool. and thanks guys :)
great! thats so cool.
I did kinda...
Good idea
