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The first thing I noticed about him were his eyes. I thought it was pretty remarkable that so many different shades of blue were reflected in them.

Good starter or not? Constructive critism(cant spell) please

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Answer #1

I did kinda…

Answer #2

yeah it’s great!!! so much better than what I can write :) funmail it to me when you finish please :)

Answer #3

did you ever get the next part? funmail me if you did!

Answer #4

great! thats so cool.

Answer #5

The first thing I noticed about him were his eyes. I thought it was pretty remarkable that so many different shades of blue were reflected in them. Kind of like the ocean, But from that moment I could feel that he was much deeper than any Ocean I’ve ever seen. You cannot glance in his direction without locking your gaze into his. He had a unique way of capturing your mind for a moment and making it seem like years.

Just a suggestion lol. I don’t know…

Answer #6

Good idea

Answer #7

I like it, but you might want to change the word remarkable to something else. Maybe amazing or something. I like it though!

Answer #8

cool. and thanks guys :)

Answer #9

take your time I got at least 15 years left in my life :D

Answer #10

very nice im instantly into it!

Answer #11

ok can’t wait to hear the rest of it :) just funmail when you finish it

Answer #12

sure. IF I finish it. will try though :)

Answer #13

thanks! yea actually it will be. There will be more coming, so watch this space

Answer #14

it sound perfect. :D sound like a story with a deep romance in it

Who thinks this is a good starter to a story?

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