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what; Do you like my new poem?

Here it is, here we go, here comes another blow. Trying not to let go, Just need to make it tell tomorrow. Im suffocating, The images in my mind arent yet fading. Im slowly dying, Theres no use in crying. First comes dad, another blow to my face, Then comes mom to take his place. Imitating, So I lay here waiting. Waiting for them to be through, They keep beating me, Im black and blue. They wont stop tell I die, So I let out my last breath, my last sigh. I finally give in, I will never open my eyes again!

By Alexis Norton

(not bout me or anyone I know… just felt like writing)

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Answer #1

I liked it and all but it sounds like a rap song no offense

Answer #2

I really like it because it is really deep and emotional. It’s great I like it!

Answer #3

its sad but ya I llike it

Answer #4

I think it is pretty good too. In line 4 should tell be till? You should leave it as tell, I think.

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