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Poem I wrote with a friend

I think of you and ask myself why I’ve been sitting here cry after cry when you left you broke my heart now I sit in this dark a blade placed in the palm of my hand you said “It’s over.” and left me stand I still love you and you wont return My heart caught on fire and now it’s burned I cant recover I guess it’s my fault My thoughts hurt like a cut on salt I close my eyes and let the blade rise putting it to my wrist again I cry blood seeps covering the floor. it doesn’t hurt its not even sore. my hand slowly drops the blade this wouldn’t have happened if you would have stayed My eyes shut I feel at my best the pain is over my body rests.

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Answer #1

I think it’s a good poem. The rhymes were magnificent and you really put in a lot of heart, as I can tell. But the part about the wrist slitting. I disapprove. Even if a best friend were to leave you, you should never hurt yourself. I think whats best would be to see things in a positive way. Writing poems like these influence others to slit their wrists as well believing that they have an excuse. I liked this poem… But the slitting, nuh uh. I’d like to see a more happy poem sometime. Sure you can write a sad poem but please disclude slitting. Please don’t find what I said to be offensive. But hurting yourself never has an excuse.

Answer #2

Thanks but uh. I wrote this poem from truth. How I felt and what I did.

So thanks…

Answer #3

OMG THATS SO GOOD DO you THINK you CAN WRITE ABOUT FRIENDS GETING BACK TOGETHER

Answer #4

I’m not sure probably why?

Answer #5

Thanks :)

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