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my peom (: oppinions pleasee.

I want you close. but you seem so distant. I want to keep you near. but inside I have a fear. what if you dont like what you find? will I be the only one on your mind? I want to say I love you too. but im not sure if I truely do. I dont what your lie’s the only thing you can say that I’ll truely dispise. I want to be your one and only instead of being left feeling lonely.

      - midnight dreamer.

what do you think? honest oppinions please. and I apologize for the spelling mistakes. spelling isnt one of my strongest subjects. and please if you see somthing that you think I could improve on (outher than my spelling) tell me. thanks everyone!

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Answer #1

tear that was sooo beautiful :D I love it but I dun think you should put it up on the internet like that people will steal it thats what I did went onto youtube saw it on some randoms guy account saying he wrote this and that it mean a lot to him.. people these days :P

Answer #2

tears omg, I have a lost relationship and this poem made me think back to it <=…{ I really miss her…but I’ll never get her back because she has a much better boyfriend now, so…there’s no chance <=( But thank you for making such a touching poem…I love reading poems…<=)

Answer #3

I think that you are too concerned with trying to make everything rhyme. I wouldn’t concentrate on that so much. It takes away from the subject or topic (whatever it is). Spelling is no big deal. You did use the wrong word when you said ‘I don’t ‘what’ your lies’. You meant to say ‘want’ instead of ‘what’.

Question? What’s the poem about?

Answer #4

I think its…AWSOME bttr than I could come up with! when im at school and we have 2 rite poems I go nutz and as soon my teacher says tha word poem im my head im like aww crap

Answer #5

I think that it is wicked good annnd the title is the best part

I think you should work on the last two lines they dont really go together. =]

Answer #6

It’s very beautiful. I wish I could come up with half the words you do. My favourite bit is these two lines

“I dont what your lie’s the only thing you can say that I’ll truely dispise. “

I love how the lies and despise goes together. However shouldn’t that be “I don’t WANT your lies”?

Answer #7

Aw almost every poem I read on here is so good! But this is one I can actually relate to. It says everything I feel. Its really good :)

Answer #8

dats was totally amazin !!

Answer #9

love it. I would be honored if you joined my poetry group:)

Answer #10

yeah I know… =’{ hopeully no one will steal it and call it their own but I just wanted oppinions. so thank you

Answer #11

yes I am sorry everyone when it said what I ment to put want. my appolgizes!!