Kisses- opinions on this poem?

I am here and waiting for you. My eyes are swollen and searching for you. I spot you and our lips meet. Hands in the air in harsh defeat. Looking for an answer hoping for the best. Come to me and tell me the rest. Love and kisses are all that I will need. But just true love sister is not for me, Kisses, and kisses, and kisses galor. Yes oh yes give one more. The end :(:)

I know that the ending sounds a little weird but I am thinking of having all of these poems published. The other part that I want to add on goes like this

After the kisses are done and through I look around searching for you And then you are there all over again And we’re back to where we’ve started till then. Oh no look at the time. 2 in the morning and then I realize. I’m going to be boney. My hands are shaking and my heart is racing. My dad is out looking and then I am safely, In my ouwn house in my own bed The lights are off and I am not dead. It was just a dream I mutter to myself but it was all so real I wimper until, the door to my room gets cracked open a bit And my dad comes in and says whats with the screaming fit? I look around and then I’m ok but the dream continues on anyway. Kisses kisses kisses galor give me a minute for just a few more.:)

What do you think? With this little part added on?

Answer #1

I really like the second half you added!!! read quite a few peoms you have up on here!!! I love them!!! publish them, I want a book of them!!! what country you in???

Answer #2

I’m in the usa and I live in colorado. my mom and I are going to try and get these published. I need to know what the cover,the title and the publisher should be. I also would like for those of you who like my poems to fun mail me and I can keep you guys updated. thanks there will be more this afternoon. thank you for reading.

emodancer. :):):):):):):):)

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