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Alright I need your opinions on this poem

I need opinions on this poem cause I wrote it and I’m handing it in in a way so I need opinions…

Shut-eye

Another stroke The artist paints Colors bleed And then he faints…

What would you do? If you were him On the ground In light so dim

The colors you knew Once so bright Have fallen into The land of dim light

Now all the hues That blended so well Spill from the mural, Casting a spell

The rich tones of gray Jump from the art They dance in great rhythem To the beat of a heart

The yellows and red Though fire they mime Tip toe in sync To the brush strokes time

Now purples and blues So seemingly calm Ballet across The artist’s arm

As the music pulses The colors, they dance Pirroeting in form To a capturing trance

What would you do? If you were him On the ground In light so dim

The colors you knew Once so bright Have fallen into The land of dim light

Awake is the artist He questions the scene from the sky The colors dancing off the canvas Oh how much we miss when we shut-eye.

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Answer #1

Wow!

Answer #2

I thinks it’s very well written.

Answer #3

omg thats really beautiful. you have major creativity and it flows so smoothly lol.

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