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How is this poem? :) , title'lost'?

Tricks and the slides of hand I can’t play! A silent and shallow mind haunts my day. The busy road is not the place for me… The twist and turns are getting old for me.

I don’t see where they are going anymore. And now here I’m just where I was before. As puzzled as a kid I remember… Staring out to the stars for an answer.

Your pretty face is clouded in my eyes. I lost myself in the darkness and lies. I don’t see where they are going anymore… Took me to a place, I was here before.

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Answer #1

thanks :) again

Answer #2

No problem your poem is GREAT!!!

Answer #3

I think its a little sweet

Answer #4

OMG thats such a good poem no joke it was great = D

Answer #5

thanks a lot. :)

Answer #6

it was alright I thinkyou could add a little more intresting. but it was good. just a ittl more work.

Answer #7

I’ld say about average. Could use some work. I like the central idea behind it. It’s not as shallow as a lot of people like to make theirs, and it’s a bit metaphorical which is nice. It has potential.

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