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Will I Catch His Eye?

this is a poem I just made up last night, after not being able to sleep. he’s in my dreams, and I can’t get him out of my head. maybe this will let him know. let me know what you think.

That One Perfect Guy

I see you’re online every day I want to talk with you, but don’t know what to say should I go on with life as if I know I’m going to be all right or will I crumble down, and forget about life?

I know you don’t notice me, for I’m a blur all the other girls so pretty but not me aint no way I could ever be with you it hurts, cuts deep into my soul, but what can I do?

both Linkin Park fans, and on the same site but then so far away, living spearate lives will I ever be your and you be mine seems impossible, but I can’t just forget.

the same age, but different in many ways will that stop love, evidentally it already is I know you don’t like me, no other guys do go on, pass me by, every other guy does.

I saw you yesterday here, and felt my heart jump I then realized why I can’t sleep, it’s you you’re always on my mind, day in and day out but now the question is…will I get a chance?

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Answer #1

Good, formatted fairly well:

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Answer #2

Its Relly good! && I know how you feel.

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