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Star filled eyes By Niceguy
How do you express when a soul so bright and rare to be found turns your life completely around?
A single hello can turn your world upside down and in some cases take away all those frowns.
Never did I know that one pair of eyes could change my life and make everything alright.
Forever I shall love thee, for believing in me and opening your arms to create all these wonderful memories.
No man knows what images he will see, before he rests' for eternity. But in that flash I'm sure ill see, those star filled eyes staring back at me.
So the lessons here are plain to see, strip away all that you've known and let the past be, while converting your religion to humanity.
Because for every pair of eyes that you may see, could answer all your questions, and truly... Set you free.
your a smart person cuddles... id like to chat with you. when I wrote these I was in a lot of pain, but the newer ones is me reflecting all my issues out on paper from the past, finally letting go of stuff is the stage im at now.and looking to the future. you were able to distinguish what kind of person I am and the problems in my past just by reading my poetry... that means your a very smart, observing person. and id like to know ya.
I think it was pretty good. buteveyone has their own ways of looking at things. it seems like you are in a lot of pain. I just read all your other poems thy are really good. it seems like you were in love and in pain at the same. but you never forget your first love. I would like to read some more of your poems. good luck.
very nice poem but I think it needs to flow a little bit better. but your wording is amazing!
yea I agree, great poem just maybe work on the ending a bit with the flow.
