Who Likes These Lyrics?

okay so before some of yall answred my question what to write my new song about. and a lot of yall said love so.I chose that. so tell me if yall like the new lyrics:

                               Fly Away
                             [verse one]

mmm. you said I ment soo much to you. and you gave me everything and a diamond ring. but you think money is the root of all that kills. but you gave a perfect life. so why do we just throw it all away. its like I try so hard just to understand why cant we just forget the past, and fly away.

                             [chorus]

like a bird in the sky. it looks so easy so why dont we just try for a while. and just flyy. we could get as high as a kite if we just fly away.

                           [verse two]

looking’ outside at this beautiful day. so why we gota be fightin’ like this. why don’t we just save it for a rainy day and. flyy. I’m ready for a break. im ready to give whatever it takes. cause’ I’m bird and I need to be free, away from all this. right now.. I think its time to jump off tha ledge, and finaly. Fly Awayyy.

                          [chorus]

like a bird in the sky. it looks so easy so why dont we just try for a while. and just flyy. we could get as high as a kite if we just fly away.