What do you think of this poem ?

So I had to write it for a project in my Social Studies class about how the Acadians felt when they were forced to leave and go to different countries ::

The sun is setting over this continous maze People sit in clusters as they all try to muster their strength Some sob , while others contain their anger We sit here in this chamber and wonder of the danger The ship finally comes ashore and everyone unboards The trees sway in the breeze They watch as I walk away in a daze

So yeah I was just wondering if it made sense for that type of scenario . And also do you think the ending sentence would be better as They watch as I walk away in the east , or the way it is right now ?

Answer #1

I like it

Answer #2

great word choce!!!

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