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I need to know what you think of my poem I need all the criticism I can get so I am to improve.hope you like it. And plez forgive spelling.
-end it quick-
It runs throw me
It runs throw you
But in the end it will come out of us both
Try to deny
The truth is you die
I die
We all die
Try and stop the enviable
And it comes faster
So do me a favor and end it quick.
I don't like how from the first line the reader can pretty much figure out where the poem is going. Mabey to try to make a better image and way to describe is to throw in some medphors, and be more creative with it. but your on the right track
Other than spelling, it's alright, I guess.
Christiana, it's a poem. It doesn't mean it's the way he really feels. I write about murders mostly, but I'd never harm anybody.
I really like it except dont end your life quick theres so much to live for hun
I like it just it doesnt really appeal 2 me