I need to know what you think of my poem I need all the criticism I can get so I am to improve.hope you like it. And plez forgive spelling.
-end it quick-
It runs throw me
It runs throw you
But in the end it will come out of us both
Try to deny
The truth is you die
We all die
Try and stop the enviable
And it comes faster
So do me a favor and end it quick.
I don't like how from the first line the reader can pretty much figure out where the poem is going. Mabey to try to make a better image and way to describe is to throw in some medphors, and be more creative with it. but your on the right track
Other than spelling, it's alright, I guess.
Christiana, it's a poem. It doesn't mean it's the way he really feels. I write about murders mostly, but I'd never harm anybody.
I really like it except dont end your life quick theres so much to live for hun
I like it just it doesnt really appeal 2 me