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Her sublime lips allure my soul
The gift of un-equivalent perfection Laid before me in ethereal silence And yet – the perfection is not of her

My heart outstretched to her, naked My affection for her flowing ever so slowly, caressing her lips The flavor of her sweetness radiates on my tongue Silenced love permeates my skin Her love intertwines with my heart Her love flourishes out of my breath And yet, I long to breathe nevermore

Any criticism will be accepted! :)