What do you think of my poem "Melt"?

This is a poem I’ve just written called “Melt.”

I will love you languid When you’re tired Stay in your white nest All day if you like I’ll stare at you while you stare at your eyelids I’ll move over you like a sentient glacier

Or if you like We’ll make lavalamp love I’ll flow through you slow Heat you from the inside With the look in my eyes I will love you languid I’m made of syrup and warm wax I’ll melt myself over your skin Delicately coating you in sugar And heat

Answer #1

Thank you very much!

Answer #2

The second half is stirring to ones passion.

Nice

Answer #3

I liked it too. I could almost feel what you were saying. Cool. :)

Answer #4

god that was intense I love it though!! good job :)

Answer #5

good job, I’ll have to let you hear the one I wrote, it was dedicated to one of my good friends that moved away.

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