Poem...what do you think?

I’m not really sure if this one makes sense…it does to me. lol.

The Needer

You seem to think I’ve gone too far, But who were you to watch me char? I’ve made a promise to myself, to let you bleed and give no help. I’m sick of helping you, you foul. You never helped me, I’m your tool. I’ll sit here dying, you won’t care. You’ve found a new one to take care. Poor girl who fell under your spell. Will you let her out of that hell? She’ll never love you after that. What will you do knowing that fact?

Answer #1

nice poem I like it but an advice from a friend dont always stict 2 the rules break them a littel bit it doesnt have 2 always ryhm it could break the poem so in oder not 2 break the poem break the rules but its great I really liked it :)

Answer #2

It makes sense to me. It is good but I would keep adding on

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