What do you think of my poem?

Dream

What am I to you? The pond you drowned in? Or the book titled Fin?

I heard your final wish The one at midnight. When you slept with fish Losing all sight.

You saw a fish so goldly He saw you so fragile. You said hold me We’ll be here for a while.

As we began to drift Time turned Autumn. We had one last kiss Then slid to the bottom.

We drifted upon a sting ray He began to swim. He fell to the will Of Dream’s devious wim.

He swam to the ocean And flew from the sea. He flew without motion And came to me.

Answer #1

thats great!! it works really well with the piano and guiter its amazing!

Answer #2

Glad you like it. ^.^

Answer #3

<3 it !!

Answer #4

Thanx, haven’t been on here in forever but thankx anyways. lolz

Answer #5

Thanx, haven’t been on here in forever but thankx anyways. lolz

Answer #6

In general I’m not following it very well as far as clarity goes any how.

It seems like a deep open though and personal and I believe any poem written from some were deep inside is a good poem simply because you gave a part of your self to it.

Answer #7

In general I’m not following it very well as far as clarity goes any how.

It seems like a deep open though and personal and I believe any poem written from some were deep inside is a good poem simply because you gave a part of your self to it.

Answer #8

In general I’m not following it very well as far as clarity goes any how.

It seems like a deep open though and personal and I believe any poem written from some were deep inside is a good poem simply because you gave a part of your self to it.

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