Please offer critique on my poem.

When I awake, in morning’s gentle light, you are the birds, beginning to take flight. In those fuzzy-edged moments before the sun’s rays you are there, to bring me out of my dull haze. When my heart aches, so full of pain, you are my saviour, my drought breaking rain. My salvation, my religion, my food and my cure, when I am unsteady, you make me feel so sure. My last hour I would want to spend with you, together untill the grass is heavy with dew.

Please offer any comments, advice you have about my poem. Also, if you have an idea for a title, please feel free to chip in. Thanks heaps!

Answer #1

WOWOWOWOWOW! TIS AN AMAZING POEM!!!

Answer #2

Nice! I have an idea for it, “What You Are To Me” or something like that

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