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Adivce on a poem please

(my boyfriends name here), I love you oh so very much, my heart stops everytime we touch, I wish time would freeze, so you could stay here with me, the way I feel for you, to me is all so new, I know this is not a work of art, this poem comes from my heart, but I need you to comphrend, that this hand I lend, will always stay open, all I can do is stay hopin’, that your hand will be too, because this feeling is all so new, And I like it! Every Single Bit!

So questions.. 1 did you like it or no…y? 2 any changes? 3 problems? 4 is it any good? just leave a comment to please!!!

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Answer #1
  1. I like it A LOT! Keep writing like this and you’ll get somewhere.
  2. No changes need to be made. 3.I don’t see any problems with it.
  3. It is ver good. I don’t think the average person could come up with something like that after a year or two of trying. I don’t write but happy writing!
Answer #2

thats a lovely poem he should love it! I would if I were him lol ;)

Answer #3

ITS GREAT!!!

Answer #4

its very sweet. good job!

Answer #5

Nice poem

Answer #6

Nice…go with it!

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