How to re-word this - please help like ASAP!

I’m writing a book, and I wrote this sentence, and I know it’s not that great. but I dun’t know how to re-word it. any ideas?

the sentence: “Let’s see where that leads to.” Jacina Summers said to her husband Cole, while pointing to what looked like an old trail starting at the beach where Jacina and Cole were standing.

Answer #1

Thanks!!!

Answer #2

Great suggestion! But, sorry to be fussy, Phrannie, the punctuation needs to be changed:

“Let’s see where that leads to,” Jacina…

You need a comma after the quote because it is part of the rest of the sentence (it’s the direct object of the verb ‘said’ in fact)

Answer #3

“Let’s see where that leads to.” Jacina Summers said to her husband Cole, pointing to what looked like an old trail starting at the beach.

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