Here is a poem of mine_ any thoughts?

Very well written and thought provoking

awesome poem. I loved it!

beautiful poem. I liked it.

I like all of it except the very end. If you made the end like the rest of it it would be perfect.

do you mean the last four lines? I get what you mean but I cant think of anything else to put there, do you think I should just cut that bit out and leave it?

what do you think of the new ending?

To the blood I’m yet to weep, To the babes yet to speak, To the hurt not yet felt, The heart still intact, The love still to be lost, And the silence to be heard

To the wars yet to be fought, The lives potentially lost To the horrors not yet seen And the fires to burn in my heart,

To the depressions we never saw coming, The houses burning before our eyes, And the floods flashing all around, To the winds a blowing, The waves a growing And the volcanoes that will soon erupt,

To the feelings so far unfelt The loves not yet declared And the holes yet to be filled…

there is something missing but I dont know what to put in.

I thought of a way I could do it last night…

I dedicate this poem To the blood I’m yet to weep, To the babes yet to speak, To the hurt not yet felt, The heart still intact, The love still to be lost, And the silence to be heard

To the wars yet to be fought, The lives potentially lost To the horrors not yet seen And the fires to burn in my heart,

To the depressions we never saw coming, The houses burning before our eyes, And the floods flashing all around, To the winds a blowing, The waves a growing And the volcanoes that will soon erupt,

To the feelings so far unfelt The loves not yet declared And finally the holes yet to be filled

yaaay I finished it!!! ;)