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Death I Wish For. Death must be a beautiful experience So calm, so composed – the promise of permanence and certainty, hope of entry into an uncomplicated entity where company is available in plenty. Such whiteness, such calm and solace much unlike life on earth; if I ever had a chance to choose I would never have opted for such a life full of dearth. Heart breaks, tears, poverty, hunger, war, pressure, desperation and race these are the terms known to me because I am trapped in this mortal effigy, I envy the ones who are free from this numinous conspiracy i want to die and be forever free with you
I think you have definite potential, but I have a difficult time critiquing dark poetry....do you have anything light and happy?
Yeah i mean its good. but seems like ur depressed.. try writing bout flowers or love idk anything but that
Agreed with Connor...the words are fine - apparently it's YOUR vocabulary that needs work.
i do, i have many different poem's sorts and i am a published poet as of a few months ago
Very gloomy, but the vocab was very well done and used. It like it, gj. It's haunting.
um ok well i dont think you used some of your words correctly
kinda dark, but i love it. keep writing! :)
Sort of depressing but I like it :)
Which words? I don't see that D:
kinda depressin.. but good :)
