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Dear Mother,

This is another poem of my. Just tell me if you like it or not and be honest.

Dear mother, I’m sorry to say But I wont be home today That this will be last time you see my face And my whole life will be erase This will be the last time you hear my voice I just have to let you know that this was my choice To just let this be the end of me So I can finally be free When you read this, you might cry But I want you to know I’ll be watching you in the sky And when people ask what happened to me I want you to know that she just wanted to be free To get away from her distress For she was in a lot of stress That she loved and cared for everyone And now her real life has begun Mom, I have always loved you And you know that, too But right now, I’m about to be away And I just want to let you know that I love you everyday This might cause you to seriously cry But this is the last goodbye

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Answer #1

hey, thx to asdfg63plus1 for giving me that mistake, I wrote a better part for one of the lines.

To get away from her distress From her all her tensions, yes

Answer #2

That was a really good poem, I just hope that it isn’t based on future events. But there was one thing that seemed a little odd, it was the lines “To get away from her distress, For she was in a lot of stress “ It’s just that it sounded a little strange because they both had the word stress as the root of the word, so it sounded repetitive and was odd to read. But other than that, I really liked it. :)

Answer #3

oh wow, I love this soo much, I was like in tears!

Answer #4

yes, this poem actually made me cry. I love poems like this, I would really love to read another.

Answer #5

Yea, your new line sounds a lot better IMO, and you’re welcome, you said to be honest, and so I did just that :)

Answer #6

So sad but really good and touching. I wish I was THAT good at it! You are a natural.

Answer #7

Well written but it’s message doesn’t reflect a Happy Heart.

Answer #8

Yeah. Well done for coppying and pasting m’dear :)