I wrote this poem when I was 12 and just want to see what you think:
The girl that changed my heart
There is a girl, Who lay her head, Upon my chest, To lose herself, In the valley of the shadow of death.
She never knew where she was going, Rowing down the river to a much forbidden land. Right into the trap that I had planned. The animals for boredom, And the children just for games, The nooses in the trees And all the blood in all the cages.
I told her, "if you care to, flip the pages and see what has become of me since the day that I was born."
But, when she looked into my eyes, To discern the truth from all the lies, She had stumbled upon a thing, Which did catch her by surprise.
All the lives I had toyed with and destroyed, Were all locked up in a box. The wonder the amazement, disappointment, And enragement were all coiled up together In the form of a lock, on a box That I had kept with me deep inside my heart.
She knew where I had been, And she knew where we were going. She burned a path right to my door and I had let her in. But how? She didn’t say a word. But why? If she does this anymore, Then I'll become what I am aiming to avoid, Under the cover of the night…
There is a girl, Who lay her head, Upon my chest, To lose herself, In the valley of the shadow of life.
What do you think???
YES YES YES JAES!!! Thank you for taking the time to understand the underlying meaning of my poem! Unlike these spoon-fed babies who for some reason, can't. :)
it's kind of hard to understand. maybe if you give a theme to it, you'll be able to understand it more.
hey its nice but wel I couldnt understand the whole meaning of it ...but it I liked it
I thought it was awesome, it was about the realization of love right?
That was truely beautiful Jax, I'm in TEARS right now:)
I think your poem is very sweet and nice!!