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I look into your eyes,I see all I'd ever want to all I've ever dreamed, everything I've ever thought of you and me, sure we've fought but we were being imature, I feel like I need a cure when I'm away from you, you are the shadow walking next to me,down the street, you are the air I breath, oh baby, can't live without you, I love bein around you, I'm happy, happy as I could ever be, I love you, I would break from the seems if I had to live without you next to me,I want our world to be just you and me, singing,dancing,laughing,watching and movie, I don't care aslong as your with me.
I think it's a cheesy but I guess comment and give your opinion.
I don't write poetry anymore, I write academic essays, have written around 35 on English, History, Greek and Roman Civilisation and Education over the past 6 years.I read a lot of poetry and have studied it extensively, as an English graduate and English teacher. So I know good poetry and what it consists of. I personally didn't like my poetry even though it was published in various collections, when I read great poets such as Keats and Shakespeare I have no need to write my own, I prefer to appreciate timeless poetry. Too many people call themselves 'poets' when they are not worthy of the word. And I don't consider myself one.
well I just write, I don't care what people think, if I think it makes sense and I like it enough to show it to poeple then, what ever I'm gunna put it up and if other people don't like it then, that's ok, they have their own opinion.
Yeah if you meant it to be cheesy then you're right on the money. However, if you want to improve on chessy have another look and revise. Good luck.
I love this peom. its awesome. I use to write poems. but I guess ill post a few of mine sometime soon to see what others think. thx!
yeah well what ev I write what I write so I just gues you could either like it or don't.but thx on the good luck part.
I agree it is cheesy, too many 'I's and 'happy's/
well that's why I put it's cheesy in there...
thx:)
