Poems, are they good?

Hi I wrote some poems, I’m not sure if they are good or not.

As I glanced upon her Shining like the Sun Something ticked within me And told me to have fun Then I went to see her Sitting on a bench But before I could get close There was a thirst I had to quench This missing piece inside my heart This hole that never ends I wondered how to fill this hole And how to make amends. No matter how much I try Inside me I can’t help but cry Nothing that I do or try could ever make me rectify The feelings that are within me.

On the Beach I see your glow Your body makes the oceans flow Your eyes light up like the starlit sky When I hold you I touch the sky Your smile glows like the moon I hope to see you very soon When nightfall comes I think of you Your image comforts me when I’m blue You’re the only thing that’s on my mind. Your gracious looks are oh so kind. When we’re apart I’m ever sad When were together I’m really glad You are the best gift I’ve ever had. Even when you’re really mad. I cherish dearly the day we met You have enriched my life and now I’m set.

Are they good? Please give suggestions. Thank You.

Answer #1

..Nice I write poetry too…just out of hate and hurt though…I like these a lot..well done

xxForgiveMe

Answer #2

That was amazing. I loved the figurative language, I’ve been trying to write something that good for months!

~~plainwhitets

Answer #3

I have written quite a lot of poems and songs, so I know a good one when I see it, and that, my friend, was goood.

Answer #4

THEY ARE VERY GOOD… ow competition…lol MAKE MORE!!! love is usually what a lot of people are inspired by to write poems, mine are sometimes driven by hate,…but yours are very good…

Answer #5

Good!!! very good!

I love how you put them all together I love the part “On the beach I see you glow Your body makes the ocean flow” :)

Answer #6

I’ve read some of the other poems you’ve posted on this site but I think these are the best.

Answer #7

YA THEY ARE! I like them :)

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