What do you think of my poem on life? ( poem in comments below).

Oh my gosh, I love it! It has such great meaning, I want to read it over and over again =) I dont know what else to say execpt that I absolutely love it :)(:

I like it..some parts were a little wordy(ish)..but it was really really good..very nice job!!

Really? Thanks so much! It was my first poem and this is my very first compliment on it :)

Thanks Mesara :) It was my first poem. :)

Your welcome..really? well i would have never known it to be your first..

i love it!!!! you should write more poems! but i was never good eith writing ryyming poems. but yu should get it published. :))))))))))P

I personally think it is well written. I also write a bit…

I simply had to read it a few times…Absolutely brilliant my dear! Has a lot of meaning behind the words. Its truly a work of art…very detailed & self explanatory!

Pretty much explains all aspects of life…the beginning, the middle & the very bitter end!

Things we question with no real answers, a leap of faith if you will with so much to look forward to…perhaps even a wake up call!

1 piece of advice…Dont stop writing!! :) Gather all the poems you write & when you have over 20 then get them published.

Good luck.

its a good poem.

This is amazing, great job!!!! 2 thumbs up :D

This is a very good poem. ur a gr8t writer

I’m assuming because of your question that you want actual concrit? I do love it. You have managed to evoke beautiful imagery, while still conveying your thoughts. You need to work on the format, however. It will flow more easily, with pauses in the proper places and other areas highlighted. Now it is all jumbled together. I think you have a lot of promise. Please take this as encouragement, because you are talented.

yes this is what i was trying to say..lol..yes like he said..you do have talent..just work on that format..and it’ll be like perfect poetry..=D

Thank you evaoswald. I never really thought of it since I don’t really write. This one was for school work and a lot of people told me it was pretty good. I didnt know what to think of it. Thanks for your advice though, I will keep it in mind :) Thanks again Mesara, :)

Thanks :)

=] Much appreciated.

Thanks so much! =)

nooo way. lol i cant see myself getting it published. i trully suck at rhyming myself but i love poetry ! i think i should write more, but it doesnt come easy only when im in a certain mood. Thanks a million :)

hmm, not too much of a bad idea. I shall see how I go. Thanks for the confidence boost. Many thanks for your advice and comment :)

well deserved for a job well done! :)

It never does comes easy! :) (I think that is what bon jovi once wrote in one of his songs called “in these arms” when he states “You know I need you..like a poet needs the pain!” we all need something to motivate us. Sometimes it will take hours where other times 15 mins…all depends on the situation, and if the words are flowing or not… writing isnt easy, but should come out of your heart & out of ur mind!

Hope that helps!

Very true! Thanks for the advice, it did help :)

glad we could! :P

You’re welcome! I’m happy if I could be of any help!