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Is my poem good or bad?

I want to know if this poem is good. I wrote it when I was 11. its about a woman whose husband’s gone to war Here goes…

As I walk the winding road, which never seems to end, I think of you, my truest love, Time and time again…..

Thinking of you fighting there, With your shining sword, Such a determined warrior, You deserve a gold award,

Thinking of you sleeping there, In your crowded trench, Freezing cold, trying hard not to Breath in the awful stench!

Thinking of you lying there, Unconscious, maybe dead, All the blood abound you, A deep, scarlet shade of red

Waiting, Watching, Wondering, For that time to come, For you to pack your things and come All the way back home

……It’s been almost a year now, And though it feels like ten, I know that one day, you will find Your way back Home again.

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Answer #1

I think its a beautiful poem, very nice. It has a lot of meaning to it.

Answer #2

Aww, that was really good :D And I don’t usually like poems! :) I really like how it has a lot of meaning to it! Great job!!! :)

Answer #3

It’s really nice,meaningful.

Answer #4

I think you did a great job…the topic is emotional as is…making it a really good subject.

Keep on writing. :)

Answer #5

I liked this a lot!!! keep up the great work!!! :)

Answer #6

it was sh1t

Answer #7

I really like it! Great Jobb!!

Answer #8

I LOVE IT…thought it was soooo good…!!!

Answer #9

this is really good…but you do the same thing i do…it’s called forced rhyming…although i dont think forced rhyming is bad..however others do i guess…but reallly it’s a really great poem…i love it..keep it up

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