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poem for mom?

I wrote this for my mom, but I know her reaction. She’ll just sigh, and say deal with it and then act like nothing is wrong. So instead of giving this poem to her, I rather just put it on here :)

I felt sick and am in pain I felt like I was going insane I have no fever, but that doesn’t mean I didn’t feel the hammers against my head I just wanted to leave , and go to bed My ears are pounding My whole body is sore and I no how this is sounding But I just wanted you to no how bad I feel How the pain is rather real How I am tired all the time I am angry as I write this rhyme I’m being human and being fine Just hope you no the my pain is real And this poem shows how I feel

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Answer #1

here is 1 of mine I wrote a few monthes ago. I just thought maybe something ud relate too. sounds like you have a lot of issues with your mom. I use too 2. still do sometimes but got better. lol

MyStErIoUs LyFeE

being tortured by your stocking prey is more then whut I

can handle…”torchured by your soul was

enough…and now your out like a devil without a

cause…I have no feeling…” and it’s making me a lil

bit CrAzY don’t know whut to feel bout you but all’s I

can do is stay asleep in this MyStErIoUs LyFeE of

mynee…for I will never wake up..cause miyy dreams

is all I have left…cause unlike you…it’s more realistic

then whut u’ve made me too B…

Answer #2

Looks like something every young teenage girl writes. about pain… as a writer…its not bad. I’ve been writing sinse I was like 11 or 12, and im 20 now. writing a poem about pain and hate is sooo easy. real challenge is to write a happy poem, something that makes people smile without being lame…pull that off and il definately read more

Answer #3

woah you really feel that way? I thought it was going to loving

Answer #4

Well written. Keep up the good work.

Answer #5

Very nice, show it to her! So glad you took my advice, I was starting to think I give bad advice! AHAHA. Pheewww

Answer #6

that’s pretty good. I write my own stuff too but there more like journals where I just write whuteverr im feeling. =]

Answer #7

What did your mom do that you feel this way?

Answer #8

wowch. ^^. that was good. ^^. I liked it.

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