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Do you have feedback for my poem?

Since everyone is posting poems, here’s mine, don’t know if it’s any good, but feedback is welcome (yes, I know it’s kind of cliche):

I never know what to say to you these days It’s like a cloud hanging over my head Shadowing the warmth of the sun rays A deep sorrow as heavy as lead

My shoulders softly quake With a flood of tears I hold back My heart slowly about to break Wishing for the love I lack

A dream I once had A hope I once harbored Now only makes me sad I should have been smarter

Love cannot be forced It cannot be bought It cannot be coerced It cannot be caught

This is simple notion Has my life in shambles Toying with my emotions And so on I aimlessly ramble

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Answer #1

The truth. The truth: Maybe just a little cliched…don’t worry! I loved it. It made me think of…lost love (that wasn’t my fault). Keep writing; practice, practice! Post another one so I can read it when you’re done.

Answer #2

Definately thoughtful and heart-felt - seems to reflect what you hold inside - it’s very good.

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