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Can people tell me what they think of this poem please.
Cut my rists and black my eyes But don’t go telling me your lies.
Berry me six feat deap, But don’t exspect me to sleap.
And when you are in bed at night, And you see an eary light, Shake with fear And shed a tear Because my dear I am hear.
Erm... the spelling is a bit... off. It should be:
Cut my wrists and blacken my eyes, But don't go telling me your lies.
Bury be six feet deep, But don't expect me to sleep.
And where you are in bed at night, And you see and eery light, Shake with fear, And shed a tear, Because my dear, I am here.
Well... it doesn't really make any sense... what has seeing an eery light got to do with anything? lol.
And the syllables are a bit... off...
Very basic rhyming, cliched phrasing, poor spelling throughout. Needs a lot of tailoring to fit the mould.
no it sposed to be when you are in bed at night. and it not sylable based. but thankyou
well I like it anyways!:)