My Poem

My Poem, is it good? bad?

Far away, Too far, I can’t go on, Yet I love her. Her existence seems unreal, Almost a dream, Why do I put myself through this? Because I love her, And she loves me. What will I do To pass the time? I will think of her, But that causes pain Along with the happiness. But I must think of her, My mind will not focus On anything else. Time drags so slowly, 10, hours or days? I do not know. All I know, it is too long, to be away from her. I want to fall into her, lose myself in her Be one with her. She is my light In the darkness, I would go to her, But distance is, A cruel thing. The phone rings, “No I can’t come out tonight” They ask why but I, can’t tell the truth, They would only laugh, “I have business to attend to, Goodbye”. I am alone again, Unseeing, Unthinking, Unwanting, Except for her warm skin Close to mine. My whole body screams, Let her come to me, But she can’t, Or won’t? “She would come if she could, Wouldn’t she? Maybe she…” But the thought is too terrible, She wouldn’t, I know her, She loves me. I smile again, Our love is tangible, A living reality, Breathing, Keeping faith alive. Living for the day That we finally meet

will you rate my poem on a scale from 1-20

Answer #1

I know poems dont need rhyme but I think you should try writing with some rhyme in it, its an amazing poem though. except for format… I think I’ll write one based off yours… I’ve written a lot of poems. its beautiful and it describes how I feel right now… I love your ideas and if this is based off your emotions then I know how you feel… ryhming would turn your pretty good poem into an amazing peice of art XD Good Luck my friend!

Answer #2

I rate it 28906443,24790,7759 ! :] srsly dude that is a beautiful amazing stunning poem! Amazing job very well written.

Answer #3

I loveee it(: id give it an infinite ratingg

Answer #4

well yea I don’t like it sorry but critics is good for everybody

Answer #5

wats wrong with it? please

Answer #6

I love it great job ! I cant wait to read more of your writing! 20!!!

Answer #7

thnks krystal

Answer #8

well
maybe you can write smth better…?

Answer #9

I write poems, yea it is kinda of tragic, but it is beautiful

Answer #10

it’s not good?

Answer #11

I don’t like love poems, but it’s pretty good. 15?

Answer #12

sounds familiar… in many ways. but tragically beautiful

Answer #13

its depressing

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