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is this poem good

ok is this poem good I wrote it my self its called through my eyes.

she speaks to me through my heart telling me how much she loves me

I try to tell her back but my heart is silent it never speaks

the truth is in my eyes I try to tell her with my words but my love is in my eyes

she says my love is a lie that shes hurt inside but then again

a lie is only a lie when someone doesnt believe it it is fake

but then again if thats true a lie is no different then the truth

my heart beats searching for the truth but then I find, Its you!

you were the one I was searching for my life, my heart, my dream has been right there in front of my eyes

my heart opens up and it can finally say how much I love you

my heat opens up and it can finally say how much I love you

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Answer #1

I liked it, if that was meant for your girl, then you shud definitely show her that if she appreciates literature. its heart-melting :)

Answer #2

very deep and very realatable..I like it.

Answer #3

That’s really good! I love it! It is really deep and powerful. =)

Answer #4

thank you both very much it means a lot

Answer #5

I agree with the person above very deep^^ be proud of urself=]

Answer #6

I like it. it has a deep feeling to it

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