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Is this a good poem?

He stares into my eyes, As I stare into his. Our love is never ending, We’ll seal it with a kiss. He says that he has loved me since He first laid eyes on me. We shall love forevermore, I’m sure he will agree. I stare into his eyes, As he stares into mine, We’ll be living happily, Together for all of time

Any advice? Before him I was hopeless, A life without a shell. Now with him, living happily, I’m sure there is no hell. I stare into his eyes,

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Answer #1

Sorry, I somehow stuffed the last bit up : / Here it is.

He stares into my eyes, As I stare into his. Our love is never ending, We’ll seal it with a kiss. He says that he has loved me since He first laid eyes on me. We shall love forevermore, I’m sure he will agree. Before him I was hopeless, A life without a shell. Now with him, living happily, I’m sure there is no hell. I stare into his eyes, As he stares into mine, We’ll be living happily, Together for all of time

Answer #2

It sounds like a fairytale. Idealistic and romantic. I like it.

Answer #3

so beautiful and real. it gave me chill, I love it

Answer #4

Thanks! :)

Answer #5

Im sorry but Im not much as a romantic person. It’s so boring (not your poem but the whole romance thing).

Answer #6

K. That’s fine. I’m not usually into it either. This just came to me.

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