Is my poem any good

I find the main storyline to be quite powerful, though I don’t find the ending as an ending. (I feel as if there’s still more to write about)

It sounds amazing if you say it out loud. Keep it up and one day you might even get your work published. I like doing poems and stories myself. But your poem is so powerful, it really speaks out to me. =o)

There isn’t any depth to it. Unless I am missing something, everything is pretty much straightforward. Have more fun when writing. (and by fun, I don’t mean actual fun) Try to connect this to other things in life, using comparing and contrasting. Metaphors and similes are great ways to show even deeper how you or the characters feel. Shakespeare did it all the time. I think it is a good poem, but could use background symbolism. Hope this was constructive for you. Thanks for letting us read your work.