Im So Sick
Im so sick of you telling me you love me when your lying
theres no cure but... heartbreak or ... Dying
Im so Sick of crying over the stupid things you do to me
Im so sick of... you ...your the reason im gone answer to all sadness
I hurt myself over you but you dont care its to late
Im already gone
Do you Like It?
Poetry doesn't have to be sad all the time. Or about some sort of pain and heart break. Poetry seems to be misconstrued as a means to alliviate pain, but in reality it is supposed to unleash the beauty of things. It is one thing to make a poem of sadness and heartache, but try ending them on a positive note. Then it shows that all though you went through hell you came out on top. The poem then has more substance to it.
Your poem is not bad though.
its okay.. needs a lil more feeling to it though.. less blaming..
its pretty good.