20th anniversary poem for my parents

Okay so for my parent’s 20th anniversary, my brother, my sister and I saved up money to send them to a hotel called the broadmoore for 3 days and two nights on friday, april 11th. We want to tell them soon so they can change the reservations if needed, so we all wrote a poem to tell them. Pleez let me know what you think of it, or if you have any changes that would be great!!! Thanks again!!! :)

20’s a big number, I’m sure you know why, For years being married, that one’s way up high. We want you to celebrate, and have lots of fun, So we came up with a treat, from your daughters and son. Pack up your bags, and save the date On Friday, April 11, Two thousand and eight. Hop in the car, and head out east, Where a room at the Broadmoor for you has been leased. You will stay for two nights, and never have to pay, enjoy yourselves there on this special day. We love you mom and dad, you’re trip will be fun, and you being gone for two days is a treat for everyone!

Answer #1

Excellent !! - Two thumbs up !!

Answer #2

its nice girl…very well written and thought out…I know they’ll like it, maybe even bring a tear in their eyes…and I like that litlle last part ahaha its funny =],

its very good girl…trust me, I know poetry =]

Answer #3

wonderful

Answer #4

thats sweet I like it

Answer #5

aw that’s really cute, it’s perfect!

Answer #6

That is perfect.

Answer #7

DO..NOT…CHANGE..A..WORD! it is great

Answer #8

Good job…and 20 more…

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