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Do you like my poem?

Here is yet another poem of mine, that I had to do for school. Could you give me your opinions on it?

I can see the deep blue ocean. I hear children laughing, playing in the shallow waters. I can taste salt, whilst I lick my lips in anticipation. Anticipation for what? I do not know. I have been through hardships that no-one could, would know. I am old, but I can still smile at childrens laughter. I remember my birth, and all through my life. I am afraid of being barred, of people forgetting. I dream of being explored, of being discovered even deeper. I once heard secrets spoken in whispers. I do not understand pain or death, as I cannot experience either. I am beach.

Thanks for reading, and hopefully commenting, Britz

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Answer #1

okay…your a poet…keep it going

Answer #2

Wow, thankyou thankyou thankyou thankyou! I didn’t expect such a response, especially positive responses! Thanks for your support. Britz

Answer #3

awesome! great! fabulous! amazing! fantastic! intense! inspiring! wonderful! magnificant! emotional! outstanding! breathtaking! marvelous! superb! phenomonal! spectacular! remarkable! stupendous! outragious! sensational! splendid! glorious! fantasmo! extraordinary! … …if you didnt get the idea, thats A+++ work right there! keep it up! :-)

Answer #4

that was beastly good lol its pertty sweet…and no anyone readin this sayin “this dude gay” I’m not its jus a good poem

Answer #5

beautiful I s-ooo love it

  • Courtney Seeley
Answer #6

Thanks. :)

Answer #7

I REALLY like it. You are very good writing poems. You show promise. Keep it up.

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