I Need Some Help with Depth in my Story...?

How about this: As the couple continue their relationship, their love grows deeper than can be explained in 340 pages of a novel. In an attempt to get the singer from the boy, the band auditions for a recording deal, and they get it. The girl is thrilled for the boy, but they are about to go on a tour for 3 months. they won’t get to see each other until the band is done with their tour. The girl, knowing that this is the singer’s dream, lets him go. She waits for him, but after three months, he does not return. His band decided to stay in New York. She cries for weeks, but then remembers his phone number. She sends him a text saying “I love you and I am so happy for you. I’ll see you soon. Love, Me.” Little does the boy know that the girl is going to jump off of a building in New York to keep from interfering in the boy’s dream. Before she jumps, she hears her phone ring. The boy has sent her a text saying “I love you too.” She sends back just a simple word: “goodbye.” The boy replies “What does that mean?” The girl looks down and sees the small outlines of vans with station numbers. “Turn on Channel 9” The boy turns on Channel 9 and notices the girl on top of the building. “Stop. Please don’t do this.”