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what about this poem?

Every night I think of you, I think of what we used to have. I lay in my bed with nothing to do. You’re doing better now and I’m glad. I cant sleep at night, You’re always right there. Something tells me this isn’t right. You’re running through me everywhere. We had something back then, Like our special times. And I replay our memories over again, Because you were my life. Something happened and we lost it, Our lives were good for a while. Me and you were a perfect fit, And I loved to always see you smile. But as said before, We lost it all. You’re now a whore, and I was saved from that fall.

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Answer #1

I like for what it means But I agree with Nothingbutawispertotheworld. You just need to make it pop ^^^

Answer #2

kinda like it I love the 2nd to last line the most it describes one of my used to be friends lol

Answer #3

I like it , its really good.

Answer #4

Im not going to lie to you, I am not a fan of this. I write and read allot of peotry so Im just saying this through my own oppinion. I think it is a little childish.. I have also writen some childish things but I’ve been getting allot better. My best advice to you is just keep working on your writing, and in time, you will learn how to make it really pop out and just kinda make it hit the right spot. Keep writing :)

Answer #5

awww well I liked it :)

Answer #6

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