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Is my poem any good?

Every tear from my eyes feels like razors apon my skin Every heartbeat feels like an explosion The constant pain in my head has become unbearable But what hurts the most is the knife in my back The blood of betrayl dripping,,tainting everything around me This veil of darkness pulling me further from myself Covering any light that cares enough to shine my way I see your guilty hand reach for me but I cant grasp it I see your sorry fire burn near me but I feel only the cold I’ve lost my way The darkness consumes me I lay down on the bed of thorns and embrace the darkness Lost in my own head,this jail I made for myself Waiting for a light strong enough to break though But now…I sleep

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Answer #1

wow…that was soo good..I luved it! its hard to find somebody who also likes to write poetry from what seems that comes from the heart..did it? bc when its that good..its bc your inspired by something or something motivates you..I write poetry myself.

Answer #2

I love it! I write a lot too! here check it out… http://www.poetry.com/Publications/display.asp?ID=P8835375&BN=999&PN=1

I got the inspiration from my horoscope one day It makes me sound like a murderer but hey -its good!

Answer #3

Sounds pretty good.

Answer #4

not bad. But check the correct spelling

Answer #5

Haha…yup

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