What do you think of this poem I wrote?

yeah,I can relate to that…it was beautiful in a sad type of way…thanks for telling me to check it out

iTS A NICE POEM AND IT RELATES TO MOST TEENS. nice and nice. Hopefully you didn’t have to experience it because watching a parent getting beat is really painful and leaves a person with emotional problems.

It was beautiful. You should send it in to a magazine for abused women, or donate it to a program like a battered womens shelter. If there were poems like that around more mothers would leave abusive fathers. What we never realize in that situation is that it affects our children as much as it does us.

That is a very good poem. You really have a way with poems. I see a poet…yay me I can say ‘hey I knew that poet before they were famous!’ Seriously it is really good.

Wow, that was a great poem and the last line was really helped the mood. I liked the 3 s’s and it all ties together really well. I assume you mean “only one thing on my mind” instead of “only one things on my mind”? Other than that, it was amazing

I thought it was phenominal! It flowed very well, and I liked that it rhymed. I love how you related the mother’s physical pain to your emotional pain. I was a bit confused, however, at first when you said, “and I won’t have to explain.” Explain what? Was it the little girl that upset the father and caused him to beat the mother? Other than that, it was really good. You have a talent, so keep it up! :)

That was amazing. I loved it.

great peom and I love writing peoms and stuff but I don’t have the never 2 put them online

dont listen to the above it was GREAT!!! it gave me goose bumps!

I found it boring to be honest.

It was really good one but so sad : (