Tell me what you think please...

The Hold
By: Me

When I woke up this morning
you were the first thing on my mind
I think about you a lot
that's something I've come to find
Although the thoughts aren't always good
and sometimes they make me cry
I'm still glad I have...

them
because they make me strive

When I went to sleep last night
you were the last thing on my mind
I dream about you often
I've also come to find
Sometimes in those dreams
you still manage to make me cry
But thanks to my experience
I've learned how to hide
These feelings that I have for you
that make me act the way I do

I thank God for the will
or else I might lose
This game that I've been playing
with my heart and with my soul
I hope the day will come
and release this gripping hold

I think it's pretty good

oh I love love love it!!
you really express a lot of feelings! please put more up!

I think it was good in the 1st stanza but then you said the same thing just in different words in the second and it didn't have the same formation as the first one like the ABAC thing but it will be really good if you work on it a bit