Can you please tell me what you think?

You can be honest- it wont hurt my feelings. I want to give this to my boyfriend but it will be the first poem I have ever shown anyone in my entire life- I have always kept them private because they are my personal feelings, and I dont write them to...

sound good. Things you would fix or improve?

She wanders aimlessly in her mind
Trying to find the place where she feels good enough
She searches for the place she feels pretty enough

She cowers away from contact
All the while she is desperate for the connection
She balances herself between utter depression and hope

They watch as she tries to belong, but doesn’t quite fit
She is the filler for their occasional space
She has yet to achieve a role of permanence

She stops wandering and searching
Hope has died and depression floods her mind

She finds this place where she feels good enough
She finds this place where she feels pretty enough
She finds this place where she belongs and feels hope

– I found you.
Thank you for all you have done for my soul

oh I do like urs and I do like informers. if your boyfriend seems like the guy who appreciates it. then yeah give it to him(:

Wow, that is breathtaking, its beautiful in a different kind of way! But wow, oh wow! I dont think any changes need to be made, I think you should definitley show it to him, and if it freaks him out, you can write me poems haha.
Funmail me with the results!
Jadey

thats really really good
id go out with you if you did that 4 me

Wow! that's amazing! Lol I really like your poem. :D

She wanders aimlessly in her mind
searching for a place she never could find
where she could feel beautiful, sweet and divine

She cowers from touch
she cowers oh so much
yet shes desperate, alone and has cried quite enough

They watch as she tries to belong, but doesn’t quite fit
to them she is like a cat that has just been hit
making her cower in a corner, they are laughing like sh*t!

and then a light shone down from the bloody skies
it washed away the anger, the death and the cries
she stood strong from her corner of grief
and stared at the hand with wild disbelief

the place she can belong
the place she can feel strong
in this warm heart shed been waiting all along

quite an inspiration :D

=O
That's so good :DD

Wow ! you guys rock! I am not one of those that just wants the attention or feedback- I truly didnt know what reaction I would get. nice spin informer!

This is AMAZING!!!
and then a light shone down from the bloody skies
it washed away the anger, the death and the cries
she stood strong from her corner of grief
and stared at the hand with wild disbelief