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Poem feedback?

Asked by vultureofculture about 1 year ago, 3 answers.

each of these pieces of poems are seperated by stars

**changed the pattern of routine
the black and white city scene
the suits and ties
the hidden lies
they marched on through the great divide

true soldiers,city-molders
they stay cool
as the cities...

smolder

*Id rather let you take my place
than move out of the way
they say slow and steady wins the race
but im last anyway

--and thats okay

*searching for a prayer with my good eye closed
nothing but a jesus christ pose

[I hope no one gets mad over that
that would be ridiculous
anyway what do you think?]

Answered by reona1997 on Mar 31, 2008, 07:33AM
239 answers

It's quite boring, sorry... Im just telling the truth, don't take that so much.

1 person thought this was helpful

Answered by vultureofculture on Mar 31, 2008, 12:37PM
1074 answers

dont worry,I appreciate it!

Answered by jello on May 20, 2008, 06:38PM
825 answers

deffinately not boring.

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