Welcome!

FunAdvice is a social question & answer site where you can make friends, share photos and meet people near you.

FunAdvice RSS for this page:

Poem feedback?

Asked by vultureofculture 6 months ago, 3 answers.
Send me Fun Mail

each of these pieces of poems are seperated by stars

**changed the pattern of routine
the black and white city scene
the suits and ties
the hidden lies
they marched on through the great divide

true soldiers,city-molders
they stay cool
as the cities smolder

*Id rather let you take my place
than move out of the way
they say slow and steady wins the race
but im last anyway

--and thats okay

*searching for a prayer with my good eye closed
nothing but a jesus christ pose

[I hope no one gets mad over that
that would be ridiculous
anyway what do you think?]

Answered by reona1997 on Mar 31, 2008, 07:33AM
Send me Fun Mail | 257 answers.

It's quite boring, sorry... Im just telling the truth, don't take that so much.

| 1 of 1 thought this was helpful

Answered by vultureofculture on Mar 31, 2008, 12:37PM
Send me Fun Mail | 738 answers.

dont worry,I appreciate it!

Answered by jello on May 20, 2008, 06:38PM
Send me Fun Mail | 824 answers.

deffinately not boring.

Answer this Question: "Poem feedback?"