What do you think of my poem?

Its not very… modern. I wrot it in the style of old witch poetry. Btw I dont believe in this stuff myself! I just thoughht it would make an interesting poem. But I wanna know what you think! Please be honest! Thanks :)

A Witch Amongst Us There is evil amongst us Though she seems to be quite the kind soul She is working and helping, Lucifer She is plotting against us all You see now her eyes are shifting There is a menace in her surround She bares the mark of the devil To the darkness she is bound Black cats stop before her They glare at each others eyes As if they are seeming familiar As if they have something to hide Do not let appearances fool you It is the quiet we must beware For there are to be reasons for silence When no words are spoken whilst others prayer We must cease to delay the prevention Of her deeds that cause us concern We must light our torches And watch her burn, burn, burn

Answer #1

Pretty good but feels too shallow for me.

Some of it is pretty straightforward and requires little to no thought to what your’e trying to say.

Try different phrases, different wording, figurative language that combines materialistic with an expression.

Blah hard to explain but I tried, but it’s good, keep up the work.

Answer #2

Ok cool thanks :)

Answer #3

That is a nice poem. Keep it up.

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