Be Free poem what do you think?

Ok, one of my friends wrote this and I gave it, its title and did some Editing. what do you think?

Be Free

I don’t know why But I start by “Hi” To find what you hide Deep in your eyes

Something so sad That makes you mad It is time to try To stop your cry

Show your smile I hear your pain It is yelled again and again It is time to fly up to the sky

See the light from over the sea The roses and bees Sing for you and me Stop your cry and smile for me

Be free.

By Ema and Abdelrahman

Answer #1

Mdog43 is a f hole…I love poetry I wright it myself…and that poem was good…it really makes you stop and think : ) luv it

Answer #2

its gud just work on it alil more and it will b great but I c what you tryna do tho so big ups 4 that

Answer #3

First of all my sister who is in pre school could do better and what kind of name is Abdelrahman like what the hell and your use of ryhming ia worse than your name. don’t choose poetry as a career

 Send me a fun mail xoxo mdog<3333
Answer #4

I love it ^^ if I ever become faumos at what I love to do I would make that a song

Answer #5

It makes you think :)

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