New poem, any insight?

It was the magic of the moment,
For anyone who stepped up to own it
It was the light in his eyes,
It was sweet comprimise
It was her delacate taste
It was the blood running down her face
They say good things come to those who wait
But all she got was a night of fear and hate
She was alone and scared
But when she reached out for help, no one was there
No one dared to care
To pull her out of this consuming nightmare
So I swore to myself one day
I would make them pay
For throwing me away
And watching me drift away
Towards the limbo where the forgotten play
In this hell, where I'm gagged and boud
WHAT DO I DO NOW?
I can't survive
In this Infected Hive of lies
Where everyone dies
Because there's nothing left inside
Exept for a faded memory
Of her and myself sitting by the sea.
We where one and happy
We will break free

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I loved it! your great writer

you are talented. don't ever stop writing. I too loved it

aww thanx!!

your writting is amazing... I for got to coment your deviantart >_>

thank you very much!
my insperation>>>

omg I love it

amazing job
keep writing
xD

That was realy good! I loved it.. keep writing!!!

Love it and nice

oooh kamaka, the pic is so cute!!!

'Awesome' doesn't really fit, so I'll say it was nice...

OMG that was really well written you write like a pro